The conflict was between a desperate man and a desperate woman but it was hard to completely identify it since there a lot of scenes missing. One of the shots that contributed to the rising action was when the guy said "I don't want to do this." and also when he pulled out his gun. The woman also seemed to be very scared. You could use suspenseful orchestral music in the background to have a greater effect to viewers. There was no resolution since it was not finished. We especially liked the beginning shot when the guy first walks into the room; it was very suspenseful. We can't really give many suggestions since we have no idea what the point or the story of the film is. Add missing scenes, add music, and add credits. -Luis and Lizzy
The conflict was between putting the guys name on the list for a kidney transplant, or not. Some shots and dialogue that contributed to the rising action is: when the door squeaks, when there’s just a shot of Mario's face showing he is very angry, when he pulls out the gun, and when Hayley says "oh my gosh."
We think once you put in Hayley's parts, the rising actions will be more effective, but right now just with Mario's shots it is really intense. We think if you add some dramatic music, the tone and mood will be even more intense.
The climax occurred we guess when Mario pretends to shoot Hayley. But it is kind of unclear, because Hayley's parts are not added yet.
So far there is no resolution because the video is not finished yet, but we are sure the resolution will be very good. We think if you have some either happy or sad music for the resolution (depending on how the resolution ends) it will really add to the tone.
We especially like the shot of just Mario looking really angry because it helped emphasize the idea that Mario is really serious. We think when Mario pulls out the gun, you should do a close up on Mario's expression, to show he is really conflicted and he does not want to shoot Hayley. This will help emphasize the idea that Mario has to choose between shooting Hayley and losing his wife.
So far with the clips you have, we think you did an 8 on your editing. One edit we would change is cut some of Hayley writing, it drags out a little and making it shorter will help keep the audience's attention. We think for transitions straight cuts would work since it's a conversation.
We think you should definitely add music, to help make the mood really intense.
We think your title is pretty good, but you could show more intensity, because the title right now seems pretty happy and just shows the setting, and the film is not happy, from what is shown through Mario's clips. We like the font of the title, and we think it was pretty effective. Once you do add credits we think you should use the same style.
Overall, we thought your film was okay, once it is all put together we can judge it better. What we liked best was Mario's acting, because he looks and sounds pretty intense. Our strongest suggestion is to add Hayley's clips, and add some intense music.
-Alicia Fernandez and Jorge Chavez
We think once you put in Hayley's parts, the rising actions will be more effective, but right now just with Mario's shots it is really intense. We think if you add some dramatic music, the tone and mood will be even more intense.
The climax occurred we guess when Mario pretends to shoot Hayley. But it is kind of unclear, because Hayley's parts are not added yet.
So far there is no resolution because the video is not finished yet, but we are sure the resolution will be very good. We think if you have some either happy or sad music for the resolution (depending on how the resolution ends) it will really add to the tone.
We especially like the shot of just Mario looking really angry because it helped emphasize the idea that Mario is really serious. We think when Mario pulls out the gun, you should do a close up on Mario's expression, to show he is really conflicted and he does not want to shoot Hayley. This will help emphasize the idea that Mario has to choose between shooting Hayley and losing his wife.
So far with the clips you have, we think you did an 8 on your editing. One edit we would change is cut some of Hayley writing, it drags out a little and making it shorter will help keep the audience's attention. We think for transitions straight cuts would work since it's a conversation.
We think you should definitely add music, to help make the mood really intense.
We think your title is pretty good, but you could show more intensity, because the title right now seems pretty happy and just shows the setting, and the film is not happy, from what is shown through Mario's clips. We like the font of the title, and we think it was pretty effective. Once you do add credits we think you should use the same style.
Overall, we thought your film was okay, once it is all put together we can judge it better. What we liked best was Mario's acting, because he looks and sounds pretty intense. Our strongest suggestion is to add Hayley's clips, and add some intense music.
-Alicia Fernandez and Jorge Chavez
The conflict in the video was between violence and doing right. The back and forward shots between Mario and Hayley added to the suspense. When Mario walks into the room an eerie effect is added by the squeaky door closing behind him. Some things you could do to contribute to the rising action are maybe having a shot before the video starts showing Mario putting the gun in his pocket. The climax occurred when Mario takes out the gun raises his voice and says "I don't want to do it." A resolution was not evident in the draft. We liked the close up shot of Hayley after Mario pulls out the gun because it gives off the emotion of fear. The audience doesn’t know what she is going to do. We don’t really want to rate the editing yet because the video is not complete but the editing so far is really good. The shots used seemed to go well and I wouldn't change anything. Music was not included in the draft of this video but it would definitely help set the tone of the video. Even though there was not any music, the silence really gave off the sketchy feeling. No titles were in the draft but something bold would add to the mood. Overall your film looks like it has a lot of potential and brings out a strong message. What we liked best was the way Hayley and Mario portrayed their characters. Our strongest suggestion is to just make the titles stand out and to add some music.
Elissa
Cristabel- Jessica.
The conflict was between the man and the woman. The value is unclear at this moment because the video is not complete.
Here are the shots, dialog and actions that contribute to the rising action.
The conflict was between the man and the woman. The value is unclear at this moment because the video is not complete.
Here are the shots, dialog and actions that contribute to the rising action.
1. The opening scene we think the squeaky door helped establish the mood which gave off a scary vibe.
2. When he raises his voice
3. The scene where he pulls out the gun.
2. When he raises his voice
3. The scene where he pulls out the gun.
4. When she gets up out of her seat.
Here some suggestions about adding to the rising action,
1. You could add suspenseful music/sounds.
2. You could also shoot a close up on the man’s expressions to show he’s afraid of what he’s going to do. The climax was unclear because the video is incomplete.
The resolution was also missing.
You could add to the resolution by creating one.
We especially like the shot of the door from the top because it helped emphasize that something fishy was about to happen.
we think that you might add a shot right after he pulls out the gun to maybe a close up to show the woman’s expressions.
On a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing a 7.
NO MUSIC.
We think you could try using suspenseful music or sounds.
NO CREDITS.
We think that if the title had a certain different text it would have reflected better on the content. We liked the silence during the title it gave off a dead sort of feel.
Overall we thought your film was ok. What we liked was the opening shot but adding the missing clips and adding music would help.
Here some suggestions about adding to the rising action,
1. You could add suspenseful music/sounds.
2. You could also shoot a close up on the man’s expressions to show he’s afraid of what he’s going to do. The climax was unclear because the video is incomplete.
The resolution was also missing.
You could add to the resolution by creating one.
We especially like the shot of the door from the top because it helped emphasize that something fishy was about to happen.
we think that you might add a shot right after he pulls out the gun to maybe a close up to show the woman’s expressions.
On a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing a 7.
NO MUSIC.
We think you could try using suspenseful music or sounds.
NO CREDITS.
We think that if the title had a certain different text it would have reflected better on the content. We liked the silence during the title it gave off a dead sort of feel.
Overall we thought your film was ok. What we liked was the opening shot but adding the missing clips and adding music would help.
This post is from Kayla and Hayley.
The positive comments that were most meaningful to us were from Elissa and Jorge and Alicia. Elissa told us that “The back and forward shots between Mario and Hayley added to the suspense,” and that was helpful because it showed that she understood what we were trying to do. In addition, Jorge and Alicia told us that “What we liked best was Mario's acting, because he looks and sounds pretty intense,” and that helped us see that we conveyed our mood well.
The two best suggestions we got were from Luis and Lizzy and Cristabel and Jessica.
Luis and Lizzy suggested that we, “Add missing scenes, add music, and add credits.” We agree with this suggestion, and our plan to address it is to insert the scenes and add in the music we have already found. Cristabel and Jessica suggested that we, “We think that if the title had a certain different text it would have reflected better on the content.” We agree with this suggestion, and our plan to address it is to change the title and possibly the font too.
The positive comments that were most meaningful to us were from Elissa and Jorge and Alicia. Elissa told us that “The back and forward shots between Mario and Hayley added to the suspense,” and that was helpful because it showed that she understood what we were trying to do. In addition, Jorge and Alicia told us that “What we liked best was Mario's acting, because he looks and sounds pretty intense,” and that helped us see that we conveyed our mood well.
The two best suggestions we got were from Luis and Lizzy and Cristabel and Jessica.
Luis and Lizzy suggested that we, “Add missing scenes, add music, and add credits.” We agree with this suggestion, and our plan to address it is to insert the scenes and add in the music we have already found. Cristabel and Jessica suggested that we, “We think that if the title had a certain different text it would have reflected better on the content.” We agree with this suggestion, and our plan to address it is to change the title and possibly the font too.
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